Inclusion need not mean verbosity

From today's Inside Higher Ed:

The University of Alberta has reached a compromise with atheist and agnostic students who have been pushing to charge the convocation for new graduates. Canwest News Service reported that while God will remain in the charge, the wording is significantly different. The old charge asked graduates to work “for the glory of God and the honor of your country.” The new charge, being praised as more inclusive, asks graduates to work “for the uplifting of the whole people; to inspire the human spirit; for all who believe, to serve your God; and to pursue more steadfastly whatsoever things are true.”

As I commented on-line:

More inclusive, far less stirring. If they must change it, it behooves them to be less wordy.

Tradition deserves that much.